This is a review of
the blog Budget Sequester written by Shaneka Hill.
There was a bit of
confusion on trying to understand your thoughts on this topic. I wasn’t quite
sure what your stand on this was; you stated a few times that the budget
sequester has pros and cons; however, you only provided what the negative
effects would be with a focus on the impact to the Republican party and its image
in the public. After reading your blog I was left with a few questions. What
are the pros of the sequester? What does an increase in taxes have to do with
initiating the sequester? Where do you
get the facts that you quote in your blog? I would recommend in the future that
you explain you reasoning a little more to make it flow together and make it
easier for the reader to follow your thoughts.
Another area to
focus on in the future is the structure of your blog post. There are several
misspelled words such as “Umited States” and there were several “I’s” that were
not capitalized. This is an area I struggle with since I’m more used to
texting. You might have another person edit your post, if possible. Also be
aware of using “this” and it not being clear what you are referring to. For
example in the last paragraph you state, “Younger
adults and lower/middle income earners tend to be in more support of this
decision.” It is not clear what the “this decision” refers to when there is no “decision”
mentioned in the previous sentence.
My understanding of
the sequester issue its purpose is to force them to take action to make budget
cuts on their own instead of taking their time like before. From an article on
CNN explaining sequestration they said congress has known about this until 2011
yet they’ve waited until the last minute to take action. The two days mentioned
in the article you provided referred to the time congress had to implement
their own budget cuts to replace the sequester. A third point to clarify is the
issue of taxes; if the sequester is initiated it will not trigger an increase
in taxes. However, any deals that the Democrats purpose for a substitute budget
cut would include some sort of tax increase.
Overall it seemed
like you had more of a neutral stand point on the topic. In an editorial you need to
make a stand and make it clear what your point of view is.
