Review of Blog: Budget Sequester

This is a review of the blog Budget Sequester written by Shaneka Hill.

There was a bit of confusion on trying to understand your thoughts on this topic. I wasn’t quite sure what your stand on this was; you stated a few times that the budget sequester has pros and cons; however, you only provided what the negative effects would be with a focus on the impact to the Republican party and its image in the public. After reading your blog I was left with a few questions. What are the pros of the sequester? What does an increase in taxes have to do with initiating the sequester?  Where do you get the facts that you quote in your blog? I would recommend in the future that you explain you reasoning a little more to make it flow together and make it easier for the reader to follow your thoughts.

Another area to focus on in the future is the structure of your blog post. There are several misspelled words such as “Umited States” and there were several “I’s” that were not capitalized. This is an area I struggle with since I’m more used to texting. You might have another person edit your post, if possible. Also be aware of using “this” and it not being clear what you are referring to. For example in the last paragraph you state, “Younger adults and lower/middle income earners tend to be in more support of this decision.” It is not clear what the “this decision” refers to when there is no “decision” mentioned in the previous sentence.

My understanding of the sequester issue its purpose is to force them to take action to make budget cuts on their own instead of taking their time like before. From an article on CNN explaining sequestration they said congress has known about this until 2011 yet they’ve waited until the last minute to take action. The two days mentioned in the article you provided referred to the time congress had to implement their own budget cuts to replace the sequester. A third point to clarify is the issue of taxes; if the sequester is initiated it will not trigger an increase in taxes. However, any deals that the Democrats purpose for a substitute budget cut would include some sort of tax increase.

Overall it seemed like you had more of a neutral stand point on the topic. In an editorial you need to make a stand and make it clear what your point of view is.